Shadows crept across the wall as I stared across the room at
the deepening darkness. The blue glow from the television soon became the only
light in the room. Turning from the window, I again took in his small, cherubic
face.
“How can this be happening?” I muttered.
His attention remained focused on the movie, unaware of my
inner turmoil. The routine doctor’s appointment turned into an all day
nightmare as the doctors determined my son’s illness was due to Stage Four
Kidney Disease.
The door creaked open as the medical staff entered once
again. “Are you ready?”
Tears pricked my eyes as I shook my head. “I don’t think we’ll
ever be ready. Let’s get this over with though.”
The men nodded in understanding as the procedure began. My
son’s pleadings wrenched at my heart as he begged to be left alone, to go home.
The proverbial dam broke as the tears flowed freely down my cheeks. I couldn’t
make this hurt go away for him; I couldn’t take away his pain. My boy struggled
until the medicine took effect.
My prayers flowed heavenward just as the medicine coursed
through his tiny veins. Please help us
overcome this trial.
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Oh, so sad!! But it's beautifully written. Wonderful job. You're writing made me feel like I was actually there, you had such great descriptive language. Voting for you!
ReplyDeleteI'm entry #19
Thanks Jess!
DeleteOh this is so sad! Very lovely, though. I can't stand to think about the little boy crying for his mother. What a touching piece, and very different than most of the other entries.
ReplyDeleteThanks Bess!
DeleteThis definitely has the power to stir emotions. Nice one! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks David!
DeleteI hope this was not based on a personal experience. :(
ReplyDeleteUnfortunately enough, it was based on personal experience. It was a very difficult day for everyone.
DeleteThis is so heart wrenching sad but beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteThanks Christy!
DeleteVery heartfelt entry - well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you Ann!
DeleteVery sad, kids are so strong. They amazing me. Wonderfully written.
ReplyDeleteThank you Ashley! Kids do "bounce"
DeleteWow, so sad. The ache a mother feels when her child is hurting is such a strong one. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Daisy!
DeleteOhhh!! This is so sad! This is beautifully written, nice job :)
ReplyDeleteI'm #37
Thanks Alyssa!
DeleteHorrible and all too disturbing for anyone who has ever had to watch a child suffer.
ReplyDeleteWe've had our fair share of this type of suffering. It isn't fun for Mom OR for those waiting for word at home. Thanks
DeleteStephanie, I didn't know what was wrong with your son, I didn't want to pry, but your writing here explained it. I hope we will see you at our writer's chapter again. Prayers for your son.
ReplyDeleteSusan, It wouldn't have been prying. I just wasn't sure if I wanted to mention it because it would have been too near to the tragedy the other members of the group were facing that week. I'm hoping I can make it next week.
DeleteThat's pretty powerful storytelling. You did well.
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Thanks Arlee!
DeleteHear wrenching. I hope he makes it.
ReplyDeleteThanks! We have an excellent team working with us. We'll get through it!
DeleteThis is powerful and emotional. I hope your son is OK.
ReplyDeleteThanks Nick!
DeleteI didn't realize this was based on a personal experience. I read the entry and was moved by the emotion in the words. I think it is beautifully done.
ReplyDeleteI wish you and your son all the best.
Your entry has been shortlisted as one of the top five to move onto the next round of judging. Best of luck to you.
Thanks Angela! I was having a rough day until I read your comment. You totally made my day and I thank you for that!
DeleteCongratulations Steph! I hope your entry does well, it certainly shows the emotion of your turmoil! Best Wishes for both you and your son!
ReplyDeleteThanks!
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